The Delivery Boy

Working  Version

Things I liked:
 I thought that the camera shots worked well,  I thought the 180 degrees turn of the male character doing his tie up looked very effective with the narration, i also thought that when the voice over says black and white and the camera effect changs to black and white it works very well with the theme of dark and horror.

Things we need to improve or change:

I thought the narration got a bit boring, too much talking looses intrest in the film, i also thought the voice didnt sound strong enough to the dialoge as the scene at the begining is quite ordinary there needs something to keep the audience intrested. I feel like the driving to the industrial estate was a bit too long, there was some parts that didnt make sense, if he was supposed to be 'gangster' then his clothing should have been a bit more classy,  rather than shirt untucked and more creepy looking which fitted more in with the horror.

Editing 4

Throughout this month we've been using class lessons to help edit our production to get to the basic structured level. We have planned now to meet as a group and review and discuss adding any finishing touches that we believe will improve it to the best that we can.

Research on our genre

Our group had changed the idea of the voice over to create more of a gangster horror so we thought to help our knowledge of this to adapt it into our opening sequence, even though i enjoy these films and have already seen many of this genre we asked miss to bring in some British and American ganger films with a voice over during the opening sequence to annalyse and give more our ideas for our own opening sequence we analsysed : 

• Lock stock and two smoking barrels
• Goodfellas
• Inside Man
• American Gangster
• Bullet Boy
• Fight club

Garage Band

Between the middle part of editing we were introduced into garage band, which I had never used before, we each created background music for the opening sequence, mine was like the typical horror it took a few lessons to do, but after having a group disscusion on the backing music we chose to have Dans to do the background music as he was able to create his own music using instruments instead of using garage band.

Production Guide- Treatment Form

Original Draft Treatment- During writing process

Concept 

The concept of our opening sequence is an normal man who lives an ordinary life has another side to him which nobody knows of. He secretly is abducting a young girl in his boot, creating a mystery and to intrigue the audience to question the reason to why he has done this. 

Characterization


There are two main characters within our opening sequence. The male character we have used we have made to be perceived as ordinary, by his costume being a normal black coat and office work clothing. He has strong face expressions as he keeps a straight face, looks quite serious and have a mystery to him. The character of the young girl is introduced in the boot of the males car she is tied up with bruises and cuts just about visible, wearing a tracksuit which shows she has been taken on an ordinary day


Theme 
  Normality and the beginning of the opening which then ventures into a horror from the dramatic contrast you could say its classed as a psychological horror.


Tone 


The tone of this opening sequence begins as peaceful, normal, and happy which is in contrast to what is happening and his personality.

Story 

The story-line of the film begins with a man starting his daily routine before going to work. He begins to shave by then cutting himself which introduces the theme of blood. He then puts his clothes on and walks down the stairs, he puts his long black coat on and shouts goodbye to his girlfriend, which is answered to 'ring me after work' proving the vital information that the girlfriend is unaware of what the male character is secretly doing. He leaves the house and drives off. The music is turned of which is bright happy music which is contrast to the person he is to how people perceive him. The male character then arrives at the industrial estate where he gets out of his car and opens the boot. The camera is then turned to the new character of the young girl struggling in the boot trying to get out with her hands and legs tied up. The male character then slams the boot down ending the opening scene.